Walking down a well worn road
Where memories aren't clear
Things you loved have now become
Something no longer dear
Look closely at this child
See it's innocent face
Wonder what will happen when
It enters the material race
Working day and night for
A better house, a faster car
Happiness that is shown on screens
Sometimes just goes way too far
Unexplained joy is what
A bottle of bubble soap would bring
No worries about how much it costs
Unlike a beautiful golden ring
It's true that the ring lasts longer
It's true that it brings more joy
But think about the child within
And the last time you got it a toy
~written by yours truly~
I think I diverged too much in this one. I mentioned too many things and just skimmed over all of it. I'm thinking about going over it again and removing the extra details and just focusing on one or two things. Then again, aren't soap bubbles like that too? :D
Hey there!
ReplyDeleteI really liked this poem, I could feel your thoughts powerfully throughout it. Also, LOVE the doctor who theme you having going here, (from one whovian to another) it's awesome!
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Thanks for the encouraging comment :D
DeleteAnd yus, I'm currently in a Doctor Who phase xD
I'm so in love with your poem writing skills (which I wish I had)! I thought it was extremely good as is, but I'm not exactly the most well versed poem writer haha. Keep writing and posting them! :)
ReplyDeleteYay, it makes me happy that you liked it so much :3
DeleteLovely poem! I like how you captured the bubbles' ethereal quality. And the pictures you chose were a good visual aid that I think complemented the poem quite well.
ReplyDelete-Riley XO
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Thanks Riley. I think my favorite part of uploading poems on my blogs is picking out pictures for them xD
DeleteI'll check out your blog :3